By: ivory_palms
21/05/2008
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I really feel inspired by Losto's story in this thread.
However, I'd like to try something similar :)
Rather than writing my own story... everyone can contribute!
We all know the basic story, but we can add our own edge to it.
Everyone plays themselves in this story - i'd rather have no original lost characters, though your characters can be based on them (like a doctor... or druggo...etc)
You have to write your own flashbacks.
Dont know how well this will work, but lets give it a try :)
I'll post the start shortly... feel free to jump in and add to it! :) |
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By: bubs4eva@y7mail.com
21/05/2008
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| ill contribute as soon as its up and running :-D |
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By: ivory_palms
21/05/2008
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Emerald eyes flickered open as Ivory woke up. She started up at the sky for a few moments, wondering what had happened. Had she drank too much and passed out? But it had been at least a couple of months since she had last had a drink.
She slowly tried to sit up, aware of a stabbing pain in her side. She glanced down and could see a deep cut weeping blood. She pushed her hand against the wound, hoping to ease the blood flow. A loud scream pulled her back to earth, memories flooding back. Flight 815, the plane, the warning alarm, the oxygen masks... thats right. Something had gone wrong and the plane had gone down!
The young woman slowly got up, slowly staggering towards the the sound of screams and shouts.
"is this even real?" she thought to herself, stepping onto the beach and glancing around at the destruction, not even knwoing where to start.
(ok everyone now jump in!) |
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By: lost_little_girl9
21/05/2008
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My contribution :):D
Everything came back. Lucy was flying on her first holiday ever with her mother when she fell asleep. Now look where she was. All she could see was ocean and beach. Her hands were covered in blood, i deep scar reopened from three years ago. She stood up, her short legs carrying her for a short distance before she collapsed. "Plane..." Lucy mumbled, as she saw the breaking remains of flight 815. People were running around screaming, her mother among them. "Has anyone seen a little girl? She's around 12, black hair, blue eyes? Lucy? LUCY!" Her mother screamed. Lucy fell back onto the sand, lapsing into unconciousness. |
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By: ivory_palms
21/05/2008
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Ivory glanced across the destruction. People are screaming and running about like crazy. She had no idea where to start. Out of the corner of her eye she saw a young girl colapse into the sand. She quickly dashed over, falling onto her knee's into the sand and cradling the girl in her arms.
"Wake up honey..." she pleaded with the unconsioud girl, quickly checking her pulse... still alive. Well thats a good sign. She felt so bad for this girl, seeing such trouble at a young age. Her eye looked terrible. Ivory reached down and tore a part of her skirt off, using it as a pressure bandage on the girls eye. Right now, this little girl needed her help more than herself, ignoring her own injuries.
"Come on little one... wake up" she asked once more, glancing around the beach wondering whether she had family or friends around... or whether anyone else could help her. |
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By: bubs4eva@y7mail.com
21/05/2008
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im just about to get off... but ill write some tomorro ok?
nite! |
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By: ivory_palms
21/05/2008
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G'night :)
Its a continuation, so people can jump in and out when they need to. |
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By: lostoholic_fan
22/05/2008
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I inspired someone?? *tear* thanks Ivory!
I'll jump in soon!. |
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By: ivory_palms
22/05/2008
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Great! the more the merrier... jump in everyone ^.^
*waits* |
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By: ivory_palms
22/05/2008
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| come on people :P |
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By: lostoholic_fan
22/05/2008
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Losto awoke upside down inside the plane with his seatbelt still intact and his gas mask still on.
"Oh my god..." he whispered.
He heard screams of terror in the distance...explosions..an d the sounds of crashing waves. He unbuckled his seatbelt and hit the floor.
"Ah!" he yelled rubbing his head.
He ran out of the plane where he saw a beach and at least 40 people crying, screaming and fighting for their lives.
Losto looked up and saw the wing of the plane swaying in the wind, looking like it was just about to give way, than he looked under it, he saw a young pregnant woman struggling.
He bolted towards her and asked "Are you ok?".
"I'm in labour! get a doctor!" she yelled.
"I don't know where the doctors are!" Losto yelled.
Losto and the girl looked above them and saw the wing collapsing.
"AH!". |
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By: bubs4eva@y7mail.com
22/05/2008
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yet another young girl flickers her eyes as she tryed to adjust to the light except this one was a teenager, she had hazel eyes and mouse blonde hair which had blotches of dry blood through it.
She jumped to her feet to fast and feel back down, glancing around at the horrifying beach she sore a boy awaking in his upturned seat, she then saw a women dashing around looking for her daughter, she hoped it was her own but she was traveling alone. she then saw a women helping a young girl and a man struggeling for breathe.
She needed no more rest and dashed to his aid
"lay down" she ordered she adjusted his neck and head and then heard him gasp... he was breathing he layed down for a few moments and then sat up, nodded as a thankyou and then dashed off to find someone or something.
her leg was bleeding a little but it wasnt deadly so she continued to help |
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By: ivory_palms
22/05/2008
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Ivory sighed, contining to rock the young girl in her arms. She soon became aware of the growing pain in her own side, and tried to ignore it. She wasn't aware that a piece of shrapnal was stuck in her side from the plane. At this point in time, her concern was for the young girl.
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From the tree's nearby the scene, two dark eyes peered out from the shrubbery. The woman smirked to herself before stepping back into the darkness and out of sight. She knealt down into the dirt and began to mess up her hair and clothes. Finally she pulled out a smallknife and made a cut down her cheek. Not too deep, but enough to draw blood. Quickly she buried the knife before taking a deep breath and running out onto the beach into the chaos.
"Watch out!!! That wings about to collapse!" she screamed as she sprinted across the beach. |
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By: mamelia98
22/05/2008
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| *max eyes open up* where am i huh an island how did i get here when i was just on a pl... *max sees 815 crashed on the island* the plane what happened *Flash Back* uh folks we seem to be having technical difficulties with our wings but don't threat its nothing we cant fi. *815s wings fall off causing it to fall* *flash back ends* *max sees blood underneath one of the wings* *max runs towards the wing to save who's beneath it* uh its so heavy *max lifts the wing then pushes it away* oh my god *sees his friend crushed to death* jackson *Flash Back* max you know how i feel about planes there not safe jackson stop worrying we will get on the plane and be off in a few hours it will be fine fine but if i die you have pay for my funeral ha ha i will come on or We will be late |
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By: bubs4eva@y7mail.com
22/05/2008
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| try and use quotaion marks ( "" or '') it makes it easyier to read your posts |
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By: aidan.judd
23/05/2008
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"The wing has collapsed! The wing has collapsed!" someone was shouting.
He was just trying to clench away the pain. He held his eyes shut, groaning and panting difficultly as the three other survivors catered to his dire wounds.
"Hold on for a second," one of the women bent down low over him, "There's a large piece of shrapnel in your side. A doctor is coming now," she reassured him.
There was now a new voice. A fourth person had approached.
"Can you tell me your name?" said this voice.
"Edward...it's Edward," he panted, wincing from the pain in his ribs and legs.
"Edward, I'm Jack," said the voice, "Now, some of the plane shrapnel had pierced your right side, and has entered between two of your ribs. There's a high chance it's done some internal damage, but for now I'm going to remove it, okay?"
Edward's answer was a strained moan, and then tortured screams as Jack began to dewedge the piece of metal from his ribs. |
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By: aidan.judd
23/05/2008
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| sorry about putting Jack into that, but I felt it wouldn't be as realistic if our characters didn't interact with them at some point |
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By: ivory_palms
23/05/2008
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((was planning on not having originals... that way our characters could go through the experiences rather than the originalsd... but whatever :) its our story we make it how we want))
As Amy ran towards the wing, she knew it was too late. She halted as she watched the wing fall, crashing to the ground. She covered her face with her hands to shield herself from the debris and sand that flew into the air. Well, she didn't need to pretend to look shocked, this was the real deal.
She then spotted a man removing shrapnal from another and winced as she heard his cries of pain. she moved towards him and knealt down, grabbing his hand. When in pain, sometimes it helped to squeese someones hand... well it didn't help the pain but it made you feel better knowing someone was there.
"Keep your eyes on me and stay awake... you're going to get through this" she said determined, pausing to look around once more at the mess. |
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By: lost_little_girl9
23/05/2008
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Lucy tried telling herself it was a dream. She had awoken, walking towards the trees. Maybe there was a town nearby. She walked not far into the shrubbery before kicking something. HARD. A small knife was buried on the dirt, the tip of the knife still poking out. She pulled on out, wiping the blood on the grass and putting it in her pocket. She saw her discarded back pack hanging from a tree branch. Lucy sighed. "I have water in there." SHe said. Pushing up her sleeves, she began climbing the tree.
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Lucy's mother Marie ran around the wreck, praying her daughter was okay. She was approached by a group telling everyone to calm down, and that loved ones who were missing would be searched for later. Marie knew this was the best idea, and readily prepared to help them calm everyone down. Her daughter WOULD be found. She wouldn't accept leaving her lost. |
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By: bubs4eva@y7mail.com
23/05/2008
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Kelly spotted many people in pain and need, she was still in shock she thought she needed a moment to catch her breath to realise she had just survived a tragedy, a one in a billion, to think about how many had died already and yet she was alive and well.
But there was no time for that. She saw a young lady in need and dashed to her aid. she was bleeding, and was cold but there was hope she started putting pressure on the stomach and head wound. There was a sudden creacking noice and they both looked around. It happened again.
"OH MY GOD!!" screamed the lady. Kelly looked up, the wing above them was about to crush them.
"GET UP! COME ON!" Kelly ordered. The lady staggered to her feet but hardly found a patton when taking hasted steps. But it was much to late, Kelly jumped as she heard the explosion and was knocked far away. She awoke seconds later Trapped under a huge peice of metal and saw only a hand emerging from debre where she was just running with the injured lady.
"AHHHHHHH!" Kelly cryed
"HELP!!... please... please god... SOMEBODY HELP!" |
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By: lost_little_girl9
23/05/2008
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| Lucy jumped out of the tree, her favourite backpack in hand. Sitting down for a moment to take the acheing away from her feet from the long drop, she walked out of the treeline. Lucy looked around. SOmeone would need water more than her. SHe saw a lady standing near a peice of metal, screaming. Lucy ran over, before seeing the hand and the screams for help. "Oh my GOD!" Lucy said. 'Think, think think...' Lucy thought, looking to the lady next to her. Lucy dropped her backpack and ran to some of the adults. "A lady is trapped under some metal! Help lift it up! PLEASE!" She cried. THe adults looked at each other, thinking about the answer. 'OH god.' Lucy thought |
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By: megadabo7
23/05/2008
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Mega could see land not more than 20m in front, the sweel bobbing him like a small toy boat, waves crashing into the shore. He could see some commotion on land, metal everywhere and smoke in the distance. He tried waving for help as he was quickly tiring, the impact causing such pain but continued on.
He struggled, sinking as his body could no longer tread the water, he couldn't go on as his head went under one last time .
Gasping for air but swallowing water, his body went limp, peaceful he looked. A massive shark with a strange symbol swam nearby food it thought and circled the lifeless body looking for its feed. It stopped licked its choppers, twitched its tail and I swear it smiled as it said beauty a mega feed... It then swallowed him whole the bones cracking as the monster shark filled its hunger....... |
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By: megadabo7
23/05/2008
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| looks like I just wrote myself out the story...Ah well good luck ppls |
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By: lost_little_girl9
23/05/2008
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| Wha?? Awwww don't write yourself outta the story! I think i'm the only one writing anymore! :(:( |
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By: ivory_palms
23/05/2008
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| i'm still around :) |
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